Sigh. I hate it when I have to take out a bunch of words, though I’m sure some will improve the pacing. But some….maybe not. One of the things an editor changed was my comment about some people being shorter in an earlier century–referring to an antique Napoleon bed in the story. It was one that I’d seen in a showcase home and it definitely was for someone smaller. So the editor changed it to all people–well, not all people were shorter back then. My Scots and German ancestors were tall. And when I looked it up, I found an article about how the Scots were averaging 6-7 feet much earlier on in height and were shrinking in size now! My daughter-in-law had a mother who was Korean, so shorter, but her father was from the Netherlands and he and his ancestors were taller. She has his genes and has a taller stature.
So I changed the statement back to the one I’d made. Another bone of contention was a drug bust. I had too many criminals (3), and too many agents (not really specified–just one named who is a wolf and part of their wolf pack). It was a quick scene, no one really mentioned except the officer giving them their rights and another field testing the drugs, and the wolf. If you have millions worth of cocaine that the criminals are trying to retrieve, how many guys do you send? One? How many law enforcement officers? One?
It’s a work of fiction. My editor always says it must be realistic. (I write about werewolves, just for those who don’t read my books. *smiling*) To me, writing that only 1 or 2 bad guys come to pick up the cocaine is unrealistic. And law enforcement would not send a cop or two to grab them and the drugs. I watch all kinds of true crime scenarios, news reports of local drug busts and this works. Cutting back the number of people, who are not really mentioned in any detail, would be unrealistic.
My next big issue is the value of a couple of antique vases. No. Not creditable. But I researched all this when I wrote the story, so I just added 7 links of the sale of these period pieces and the amount they sold for. Some were nearly twice what I’d “sold” mine for! I priced them too low!
So I’m back to trimming. Wish me luck!
And have a super fun day!!!
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